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Dark Angel Prologue by McNish95, literature
Literature
Dark Angel Prologue
A chill hung in the air, much as it had those past few years since the fall of the Rome. The moon was high but the clouds hid her sad, graceful face from the mortal world below. A lone wolf, his coat torn to rags and speckled with blood, howled in the dark distance.
The girl pulled her black fur-lined hood closer about her pale face, her pale grey eyes darting quickly from left to right. A drunkard watched her pass and shivered when her dark shadow crawled across his pimpled skin. The black alley cat hissed and ran.
The heavy oak door of the tavern repelled from the gentle touch of her black gloved fingertips. The riot inside hardly blinked
It's been a while
since I've heard your voice
it's been a while
since I cried blue tears.
Our burning, seemingly
alive love, gone
our burning, seemingly
everlasting bond, broken.
And I think about you
day by day in this cafe
and I think about you
and our last farewell.
You're not my girl anymore
just a heartbreaker I know
you're not my girl anymore
it's time to tell you goodbye.
I'm awake and I'm weak
fallen from my heaven
I'm awake and I'm weak
and sick of this love song.
Part One:
I look down at my arm dripping blood
I know I know better
But it hurt
The way you acted
When I called you
I could see the cuts that would be there soon
But you didn't you took it calmly
Making it worse
As I walked my nails started to dig
But I kept on walking
You are telling me I'm lying
But I'm telling you the truth
Why would I tell you she misunderstood
I could have just delt with it
Dumped her the end
Instead I called you to tell you
Tell you she thought I was dating her
I told you I was dealing with it
Telling the girl she misunderstood
You started joking around making little jokes
I said I would dump he
A while ago
I met a boy
Or a guy rather
In my dreams
Sadly, I didn't write this dream
Down on a piece of paper
But I do remember
Having a little crush
He was an orphan
And, we ended up singing
Together
An act always wished for
The moment was quite
Magical
And even so...
I think we, embarrased to say
Kissed
Now, I wonder
Just...wonder
If this person, exists
I'm not asking
To fall in love with this
Stranger, but merely
Meet him
It Just Happens Sooner Ch. 1 by xXwrite4luvXx, literature
Literature
It Just Happens Sooner Ch. 1
Buzzing suddenly entered my head as I aimlessly waved my hand trying to stop the noise. My fingers reached their destination and the alarm clock shut off. Rolling over, I checked the time and groaned. Six a.m. was way too early